Help Wanted

The opening sentences of a children’s story need to draw the reader in straight away.  I’ve been mulling over a few but can’t decide which one, if any, are suitable to start my story.

Picture this:  Mr W is running late for work.  He is frantically rummaging through his cupboard trying to find his favourite suit. He is tossing clothes all over the bed and floor.  Sound like someone you know?  Yeah, me too!

Which one of the following do you like the best?  Feel free to add your own thoughts.

1)  “I’m going to be late!”  shouted Mr W, tossing clothes here and there until he found his favourite suit.  Then he dashed out the door.

2)  “Where are you?” shouted Mr W, tossing clothes left, right and centre.  He found his favourite suit, then dashed out the door.

3)  “Ah ha, there you are,” said Mr W, clothes flying left, right and centre.  He put on his favourite suit, then dashed out the door.

4)  “I’ll be late again!” shouted Mr W, wading through piles of clothes.  He found his favourite suit, then dashed out the door.

5)  Insert your suggestion here…

Thanks for your help.

Rachel

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