
Thank you to Dawn M. Miller for this week’s photo.
This post is a response to the Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers (8th April), hosted by Priceless Joy of Beautiful Words.
From Where I Stand
This day, on their twentieth wedding anniversary she felt not an ounce of love for him. Over the years, the fire that had fueled their exciting and passionate love affair had slowly burned out, leaving nothing but resentment.
As the wind chimes sang their mournful melody, Jessica tiptoed onto the verandah and gently brushed her husband’s shoulder.
“Happy Anniversary,” she whispered.
Absorbed in his own bleak emptiness, Steven reluctantly turned towards her and lightly kissed her cheek. Without the glint of a smile, he muttered, “Thanks,” and returned to his position by the railing.
Across the road, James looked up from his newspaper and waved. Jessica waved back.
From where she stood, the grass was definitely greener on the other side.
(127 words)
Oooh. Very good twist there, I like it 🙂
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Wow! ~ That was a brilliant twist at the end~ You painted the loveless picture very well ~ 🙂
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I enjoy your writing. You are able to say so much with few words.
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Excellent! Killer final sentence 🙂
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Thanks Bekki. I was hoping it would make an impact.
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It sure did 🙂
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Great story…makes it very easy to see the real situation there.
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It looks to me too that it is greener on the other side but she may find out it is not green but gray. Fantastic story Rachel! I loved how it ended too – it was a great twist!
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Thanks PJ.
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It is wonderful story Rachel!
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For shame for shame! Da cheating biatch!
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Ha, that made me laugh!
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Great story. You illustrate the misery of their relationship really well. I hope she doesn’t find herself too disappointed if she does cross over to try the ‘greener grass’.
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Interesting…..hmmm
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It’s sad that the relationship has become so dull and the fire of passion long-since extinguished. The couple can barely raise a smile between them, even on their wedding anniversary. James seems like a much better option for Jessica. Well told. 🙂
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Extinguished! That was the word I was looking for. Sounds a lot better than burned out. Thank you!
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I’m glad to have been of some use today, Rachel. Have a great weekend. 🙂
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Haha what an ending, James …
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The evil you know, or the evil you don’t? Roll your dice and move your mice, Jess.
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Good advice for Jess. Thanks Dave.
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Wow, did she wave at James with her husband standing there?
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Yes, just a friendly ‘nothing going on here’ neighbourly wave.
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Ok. lol. I felt something behind it.
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There could be something behind it (you felt right) but that’s how she would explain it if her husband queried her.
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Nice one! 😀
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Thanks for reading Victoria.
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love the ending.. wonder if James has been there a while, maybe he’s he reason for the loveless marriage haha :p
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He could well be…
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That final sentence is something! And got me thinking too, is There something goingonbetween her and James? Hmmm, very well dine 😀
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Cheaters, cheaters, read all about it!
The slow destruction of their relationship seems to have exhausted any chance of rekindling that flame. Or so it seems.
Jessica’s eyes don’t seem to be set on the prize of raising the dead. They’re set on James’ greener assets.
And Steven, who knows where his gaze is set on, but his mind is clearly somewhere else. Maybe another woman, work, or just a different life than the one he’s living with Jessica (in a way, cheating, too). It’s hard to feel bad for him when it seems like he wouldn’t even care if she slithered over to James. Actually, it seems like he would want her to give them a reason to officially lay this cold, decaying relationship to rest.
Another great piece!! Thanks for the read
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