It’s Friday again and time for Rochelle Wisoff-Field’s Friday Fictioneers 100 word writing challenge.
Here’s the picture prompt from Jennifer Pendergast:
Stuck
It had been hours since the train stopped in the middle of nowhere. As the desert sun beat down upon Mack and Archie’s shirtless backs, the unbearable heat was frying Archie’s brain.
While Mack tinkered with the engine, Archie came to the conclusion that Mack had sabotaged the train. His mind snapped and animal instinct crept in.
Kill or be killed.
Archie crept up behind Mack, and pushed the knife deep into his meaty underbelly.
He smiled greedily. The money was all his.
Only one thing concerned him…
… who was going to fix the train now?
(98 words)
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What happened to “honour amongst thieves”?
Nice twist.
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It’s a dog eat dog world out there!
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Great story!
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Thanks for reading Edwina. Are you going to join in too?
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Probably not as I am pretty rubbish at fiction! I love reading them though 🙂
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Yeah well hind-sight is a wonderful thing. Nice twist.
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‘Who’s going to fix the train now?’ Love it!!! Strong characters and great imagery. Brilliant story 😃
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Oops. He didn’t really think that one through, did he? Great story 🙂
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No, he didn’t! Too greedy, plus the heat was playing tricks on his mind.
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Great ending! We have to draw our own conclusion.
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I’d say that Archie’s brain was definitely well fried. Now he’s well and truly stuck out in the desert heat! Great story, Rachel. 🙂
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Left to perish with all his bags of money.
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Somehow, I can’t rustle up any sympathy for Archie’s predicament! Haha. 🙂
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The spooky things about this is that is could be so true. Heat can do strange things to people’s brains. I think his brain snapped! Excellent story Rachel.
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Yes, I wanted him to be hallucinating but ran out of words.
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It was really good the way it was! 🙂
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Maybe he watched him fix the train enough to do it himself.
Maybe justice is served hot in the dessert.
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Looks like he is going to get his just ‘desert’
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Ha ha. He sure is.
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It seems that Archie allowed his greed to overrule his commonsense. No camels to the rescue in that desert! Well written.
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Thanks Sarah. I like your comment about the camels!
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brilliant! Mack had it easy as Archie will have to suffer a slow painful death now..
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True. I didn’t think about it like that.
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I’m with Sandra – hindsight is a wonderful thing! Great take on the prompt, well done.
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Thanks for reading and commenting Dee.
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Dear Rachel,
My guess is that Archie won’t have to worry long. 😉 Imaginative take on the prompt.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Hot, gritty – with a dash of humor at the end. Well done!
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Thanks for reading and commenting Tiffany.
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Oops! Archie didn’t think that one through very well. I hope you don’t think I’m twisted – but this made me smile.
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No, not twisted at all. I had a bit of chuckle as I wrote the last line.
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What an ironic ending. Good writing once again, my friend! Happy Monday and cheers! ☺
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Honesty among thieves leads to stupid decisions.
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Love it! Fantstic take on the prompt. Guess he’s well and truly stuck there now lol 🙂
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Oops, I don’t think he thought that one through – must be the heat.
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