Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – Ella’s Sanctuary

Here’s the hauntingly beautiful photo (thanks Dawn!) for this week’s flash fiction hosted by Priceless Joy of Beautiful Words.

My story in response to the picture:

Ella’s Sanctuary

Ella’s head was pounding.  She was never going to get to sleep with her parents’ raucous laughter and the loud music from downstairs echoing throughout her bedroom.

 I’ll only be gone a little while.  No one will even know.

Ella gathered up her favourite teddies and ran from the house, leaving the party-goers and bright flashing lights behind. Like a ghost, she disappeared into the shadows, materialising at the edge of the woods; her safe little sanctuary.

Under the musky pink sky Ella gave her teddies a bath and laid them down on the bank to rest.

As she gazed across the lake, a sparkly object floating along the ripples caught her eye.  She waded into the water and leaned out to grab it, but it bobbed away. Ella stretched her arms out further and further until…

…her mother’s arms descended from above and plucked her cold lifeless body from the frigid water.

“No!” she screamed, cradling Ella in her arms.  “No! no! no!”

(164 words)

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14 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – Ella’s Sanctuary

  1. Nooooooooo! You are such a courageous writer. I immediately clicked on “The Blog of Happy Things” hoping for an antidote. Your last two lines will stay with me for a while. Well done!

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  2. “No one will even know.” and “like a ghost” – those lines foreshadow Ella’s fate well.

    “Ella gave her teddies a bath and laid them down on the bank to rest” – nice bit of characterisation. You really made me care about the girl.

    Good title, too. Her sanctuary turned into a death trap… Sad story, but great writing!

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